>>>2015年6月13日雅思考试试题回忆及解析

2015年6月13日雅思写作解析及语料库

小作文： 饼图和柱图的组合图：

雅思小鹏哥点评：

1. 静态饼图比较的是百分比的大小;动态饼图比较的是百分比的变化。

2. 静态柱形图比较的是百分比的高低;动态柱图比较的是百分比的变化。

As traffic and accommodation problems are increasing in the largecities，the government encourages businesses move to the rural area. Do you thinkthe advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 政府鼓励企业移到乡村地区，是否认为这种做法的利大于弊?

雅思提问的四种经典角度：

1. 两种观点讨论

2. 利弊讨论

3. 是否同意一种观点

4. 分析问题和解决问题

利弊讨论话题的布局图：

首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段：三个利好的展开：一定要有写作细节和例证的支持

三段：二个弊端的展开：一定要有写作细节和例证的支持

尾段：亮明观点：强调是……是双刃刀，有利有弊;我们应该扬长避短或者我认为……是利大于弊以及提出如何克服弊端。

作家立场：政府鼓励企业迁移到乡村地区的做法是利大于弊。

雅思小鹏哥思路拓展：

企业迁移到乡村地区利好的展开：

1. 这有助于大都市的环境的改善，因为减少了空气和噪音的污染。

2. 城市里建立大型企业会占据宝贵的土地的资源，如果企业迁出城市中心，这会缓解住房短缺的压力。

3. 在偏远的乡村地区建立企业，有助于创造地方的就业机会，繁荣当地的经济。

企业迁移到乡村地区弊端的展开：

1. 如果将城市中已有的企业迁移到偏远的地区，这可能会使城市中原企业的职员失业。

2. 一些可能污染环境的企业，例如造纸厂和化工厂，如果建设在郊区，会给当地造成一定的环境污染。

尾段策略：

虽然鼓励企业迁移到郊区可能存在一些弊端，但是，我认为，这个做法从长远看，是利大于弊的。

新东方网薛鹏原创范文赏析：

首段：背景介绍+争议焦点+作家立场

Currently, it is no rare to see that many businesses are encouraged tobuild their factories and conduct their production in those rural areas. Peoplehave been pondering the pros and cons of motivating enterprises to migrate tothe rural areas without reaching any definite consensus. As I see it, the meritsof this practice outbalance its possible demerits.

小鹏哥点评：首段个性开篇;句型引导争议焦点;清晰亮明作家立场。

二段：三点利好的展开：(三点理由)

Granted, numerous benefits can be gained via inspiring the factories to runin the remote rural areas. First, the most obvious merit is that housingshortage could be greatly ameliorated More precisely, if there are lesslarge-scaled enterprises to occupy limited land resources, then，increasingnumbers of people will have chances to realize their dreams of owning theirhouses in big cities. Further, it is conceivable that over-expansion of highlycontaminated factories in big cities will inevitably trigger environment-relatedproblems and even traffic problems, hence, the heavy traffic and undesirableliving environment can be effectively resolved if few factories are not allowedto exist in metropolis. Eventually, the migration of businesses will, to a largeextent, inject new l vitality into the further development of those rural areas.In other words, more local job opportunities can be created and thus prosper thelocal economy.

解析：housing shortage could be greatly ameliorated 住房短缺可以得到极大改善

解析：over-expansion of highly contaminated factories in big cities willinevitably trigger environment-related problems and even traffic problems高度污染的企业的扩张会带来一些环境问题和交通问题

解析：are not allowed to exist in metropolis. 不被允许在大都市存在

解析：inject new l vitality into the further development of those rural areas.为乡村地区的发展注入新鲜活力

小鹏哥点评：逻辑清晰;词汇变化;句型多元。

三段：弊端的展开(二点理由)

Nonetheless，we can never ignore the possible downsides triggered byconstructing rural enterprises. First of all, this policy will take the breadout of many city workers’ mouth provided that their former businesses have tomigrate to rural areas because most employees might be reluctant to work faraway from home. Another demerit might be that some factories such as paper millsor chemical plants will pose a threat to the local environment even though itbrings about economic incentive.

解析：take the bread out of one’s mouth v抢了某人的饭碗

解析：paper mills or chemical plants n造纸厂和化工厂

解析：pose a threat to v给……造成威胁

小鹏哥点评：侧重分明;论述有理;文风简洁。雅思词汇下载

尾段：亮明观点 + (总结理由)

In closing，my stand is that building up factories in the rural areas is adouble-edged weapon， which can used for equally good or evil. Even though itmight cause some problems，it is still a preferable and feasible attempt in thelong run.

解析：…… is a double-edged weapon， which can used for equally good or evil……是一把双刃刀，有利有弊。

解析：It is still a preferable and feasible attempt in the long run.从长远看，这依然是一个值得推荐的可行的尝试。

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