2015年1月29日雅思写作解析及语料库_新东方雅思班
2016-12-22 14:53
来源:新东方网
作者:薛鹏
2015年1月29日雅思写作解析及语料库
旅游类:
Currently, some scientists or travelers like to travel to remote naturalenvironment such as South Pole, do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.很多科学家和游客喜欢去遥远的有自然美景的地方旅行,是否利大于弊?
点评:利弊讨论;新题出现
新东方薛鹏头脑风暴导言:
在广西的龙脊梯田,很多外国的背包客回千里迢迢来到这里,久居山间农家,下地种田,吃竹筒饭,观人间奇景,旅居山间是很好的放松身心,加深对于少数民族文化洞察的方式,同时,旅行对于地方的经济有利好,例如,游客的住宿,餐饮,购物增加了地方人的收入。对于很多富人,购物之旅已无吸引力,他们宁可花上一大笔钱去南极探险,去非洲探险,甚至,企业家包机去无人岛探险。旅行带来他们新鲜体验,满足他们的好奇心。小鹏哥去不了南极,但是,我很想去漠河北极村,那里滴水成冰,如果可以住在冰屋里,一定是奇特的人生体验。
但是,没有不长杂草的花园,荒野探险,极地探险,背包客穿越原始森林,这类旅行其实是刺激和风险并存,游客的安全有时候难以保障。例如,我读过一个故事,一群旅友去四姑娘山穿越森林探险,一度迷路,走了一个礼拜才脱离险境。同时,对于旅游景区来说,日益增多的游客可能对生态环境造成不良的影响,此外,在增加旅游收入的同时,也可能使当地人增加对于外来旅游收入的依赖。
基础写作语料库:
1. enlarge one’s view of life = broaden one’s mental horizons v拓宽视野
2. deepen one’s insight into the culture of minority v 加深对于少数民族文化的洞察
3. …… is a good way to relax one’s body and ease one’s mind 是很好的放松身心的方式
4. enlarge one’s scope of knowledge v拓宽知识面
5. can bring a lot of fun and pleasure to the travelers ……可以给旅行者带来很多的快乐
6. …… can add color to their dull routine of daily life 可以给枯燥的日常生活增加乐趣
7. meet their sense of curiosities v满足他们的好奇心
8. lean to how to overcome unexpected hardships during the tripv学习克服旅行中遇到的意想不到艰辛
9. so that one can become tenacious in terms of personality所以,人在性格方面变得更加坚强
10. might impose much pressure upon the travelers economically也许增加了旅行者的经济负担
11. The safety of travel is hard to ensure 旅行的安全问题很难保障
12. The flowing sightseers might ruin the environment 日益增多的游客可能破坏环境新东方雅思班
13. make local people become over-dependent on the external tourism income使当地人对于外在旅游收入更加依赖
14. in remote areas with natural beauty 在拥有自然美景的遥远的地区
15. over the long term. 从长远看
薛鹏原创范文赏析:
首段:个性开篇+争议焦点+作家立场
The market for tourism in remote areas with natural beauty is booming at astartling rate. Today,wilderness tourism or adventure tourism has been drawingadventurers to the frontier's glaciated peaks, untouched wilderness. People havebeen debating for many years the pros and cons of exploring those remote areaswith breath-taking landscape. Personally speaking, those adventurous activitiesbenefit adventurers and local population over the long term.
薛鹏点评:首段亮剑,个性开篇,主题明确,思路清晰。
二段:探险旅行的利好的展开
Seen from the positive aspects,many benefits could be gained via exploringthose eye-catching regions. First,as for high-spending tourists, to explore theunknown such as South Pole or Africa is a kind of worthwhile adventure.Traveling exposes them to new places and unique cultures. It is rewarding forthem to read about mysterious regions, but, it is even better to visit there inperson. What travelers learn by meeting local people and absorbing the cultureof these places is something they could not learn in books. For example, myfriend Paul is a self-travel fancier, he was drawn to many destinations by theirnatural landscape and attractive cultures of indigenous people. Secondly,tourismhas a key role to play in boosting the local economy. Specifically, theprosperity of tourism has been the prime source of income because visitors willseek accommodations, buy souvenirs or visit the local people’s homes orperformances.
薛鹏点评:对于细节的充分展开: 旅行对于游客以及旅行目的地的利好。
三段:探险旅行的弊端的展开
Indeed,there is no garden without weeds. First, traveling to those remoteor untouched regions sometimes might expose explorers to dangers they are notoriginally expected to or prepared to defend against. The debate reminds me of astory, a group of self-travelers took a adventure trip in an unexploitedmountain without employing an experienced guide, they encountered someunexpected dangers,which even threatened their lives. Further, those whodwelling in fragile environment sometimes has increased their dependence on theexternal tourism income when tourism has penetrated their homelands. It is adanger if the tourism season is over.
尾段:再次亮明作家立场
Overall,there will have more adventurous travels because people’s desire toexplore the unknown will never disappear. Curious explorers should raise theirself-protection awareness. Meanwhile, efforts should be made to reduce theover-dependence on tourism income.
薛鹏点评:首尾呼应,提出如何解决探险旅行对个人和旅行地带来的弊端。
作者介绍:
薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥), 高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》,每年创作20万字原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作7.5分,托福写作29分)。
爱生活,爱运动,爱音乐电影,爱旅行美食,爱读书摄影,更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台,主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。
大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军,全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。
对于各类写作课程有精深研究,授课方式行云流水,妙语连珠,知识底蕴深厚,对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。
教学理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水,而是点燃一把火)
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