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新东方托福写作语料库:电话是否比电视影响更大_新托福考试

2016-08-10 09:55

来源:新东方北京学校

作者:薛鹏

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【创作导言】:

所谓文无定法,学术类论文写作,观点无所谓对错,只要能够自圆其说,论证有力,在行文展示你的作家文采(驾驭语言的能力),就有可能赢得高分。忠实情感,真诚写作,感动自己的文章,才能打动考官。熟悉写作评分标准,写作才有高分保障。本题为科技热题,故分享两篇原创完美范文。勤于练笔,以写为乐,才能体味备考的乐趣,童鞋加油,小鹏哥公益分享,助你圆梦。

【科技类】

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Telephone has hadgreater effect on people's lives than television.对于生活而言,电话比电视的影响更大,你是否同意这个观点?(2013年3月2日大陆 = 2010年8月21日大陆 = 2008年5月16日北美)

【类似题目】

1. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The car(automobile) has had a greater effect on society than the airplane.对于社会而言,汽车比飞机的影响更大,是否同意这个观点? (2012年8月19日)

2. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:If you need todiscuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, using e-mail/textmessaging is better than using telephone/voice-messaging.讨论棘手的问题,是不是电子邮件比电话更加合适? (2012年3月10日)

3. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Good teachers aremore important to a child's development than good parents.优秀教师比优秀家长对于孩子的影响更大,是否认同?新托福考试

【托福独立写作评分标准】:

1. 有效回应题目,阐明文章主题。

2. 逻辑条理清楚,论证充分展开。

3. 内容连贯一致,衔接自然流畅。

4. 遣词造句地道,语言驾驭娴熟。

【头脑风暴导言】:

“零电视族”、“无线互联网时代”、“手机客户端”,初见此题,这些词汇浮现脑海,所有科技产品对人们生活的影响无非是教育角度、信息角度、娱乐角度等。但是,即使是今日古稀之年的老者亦会使用微信交流,利用支付宝付费。免费的WI-FI在众多公共场所已然普及,手机之影响潜移默化,势不可挡。

【作家立场】:对比电视,手机给人们的生活带来更多的便利,因此,手机更多地影响了人们的生活。

【文章布局】

首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

二段:第一次支持作家立场

三段:第二次支持作家立场

四段:第三次支持作家立场

尾段:让步不支持观点的合理性 + 再次亮明观点

【思路拓展】:手机为何更多地影响人们的生活:

1.交流角度:手机因其携带便利,可助人们危机处理。例如,老人出门感到身体不适,可以打紧急求助电话。再比如,年轻女孩错过了回家的末班车,可以通过电话求助亲朋好友。

2.娱乐角度:手机阅读成为丰富人们精神生活的重要源泉。以我为例,我每日喜欢阅读和分享微信的朋友圈图文,在我遇到困境的时候,我喜欢求助于万能的朋友圈,通常,我的难题会迎刃而解,因此,手机成为我生活中不可缺少的部分。同时,手机成为现代人增强人际关系,拓宽交友圈的不可缺少的工具。例如,春季期间,人们习惯用微信拜年,发放电子红包,让亲朋分享快乐。

3. 便利角度:我喜欢旅行,在旅途中,手机APP给我的出行带来极大的便利。我喜欢用手机软件在《去哪儿》网预定机票和酒店。这不仅便利省时,而且,我可比较和选择价格低廉,时间便利的航班,以及交通发达,口碑良好的酒店。我曾经自驾旅行,手机高德地图APP使我轻松抵达旅行目的地。

【思路拓展】:电视为何也影响人们的生活:

1.我不得不承认:电视作为重要的科技产品,对于特定人群亦有影响。以老者为例,很多人不会使用手机复杂的功能,依然通过电视了解时政,消遣娱乐。考虑到他们视力已然下降,因此,电视才是他们最佳的获取信息和娱乐放松的源泉。

【原创范文①】支持电视比电话影响更大

首段:背景介绍 + 作家立场

Some people might fall into a dilemma when being asked to decide which ismore influential in modern society,the mobile phone or the television. However,I always insist that the cell phone has been imposing greater impacts on ourlife.

【解析】:

1. Some people might fall into a dilemma when being asked to decide ……当被问及到……的时候,也许有些人会陷入两难选择

2. However, I always insist that the cell phone has been imposing greaterimpacts on our life. 然而,我坚持认为,手机对人们的生活影响更大。

二段:第一次支持作家立场

First,the reason why the mobile phone enjoys more popularity is that itenables users to contact others by a device that they can carry around, thus, itactually brings huge convenience to people’s communication. To illustrate, if ateenage girl misses the last bus, she can just ring her parents to pick her up.Likewise, it can be used in another emergent situation, if a senior citizen feelunwell when hanging out, then, he or she can just timely contact relatives viathe cell phone.

【解析】:

1. It actually brings huge convenience to people’s communication.这给人们的交流带来极大的便利。

2. If a senior citizen feel unwell when hanging out, then, he or she canjust timely contact relatives via the cell phone. 如果老人出门感到身体不适,他可以给及时地和家人联系。

三段:第二次支持作家立场

Also,my personal experience can be taken as a convincing example. I am inthe habit of browsing and sharing those thought-provoking articles andfascinating pictures by We-Chat almost every day. I usually resort to almightycircle of friends when I encounter some thorny problems. My difficulties,in mostcases,can be effectively resolved after consulting friends’ suggestions. Hence,the cell phone has become an dispensable part in my life. Meanwhile,the mobilephone can effectively strengthen the interpersonal tie. More precisely,a populartrend is that Chinese people now prefer to express their benedictions viaWe-Chat and hand out electronic lucky money during the Spring Festival.

【解析】:

1. I am in the habit of browsing and sharing those thought-provokingarticles and fascinating pictures via We-Chat我每日喜欢阅读和分享微信朋友圈的图文。

2. I usually resort to almighty circle of friends when I encounter somethorny problems my difficulties,in most cases,can be effectively resolved afterconsulting friends’ suggestions. 在我遇到困境的时候,我通常求助于万能的朋友圈。通常,我的难题会迎刃而解。

3. hence, the cell phone has become an dispensable part in my life.因此,手机成为我生活中不可缺少的部分。

4. The mobile phone can effectively strengthen the interpersonal tie.手机可以增强人际纽带

5. Chinese people now prefer to express their benedictions via We-Chat andhand out electronic lucky money during the Spring Festival.在春节期间,中国人更喜欢通过微信表达祝福,分享电子红包。

四段:第三次支持作家立场

Last,the irreplaceable influence of the cell phone still lie in its usefulApp. As a fancier of

self-travel, I benefit a great deal from drawing on various cell phone App.When preparing the journey, I usually book hotels via Qunar applicationsoftware. After comparing the relevant price and comments, I can freely choosethose admirable and handy accommodations. Similarly, Gaode electronic map helpsme quickly indentify my destination or choose the most economical and quickestpublic transport.

【解析】:

1. The irreplaceable influence of the cell phone still lie in its usefulApp. 手机不可替代的影响依然在于其便利的应用程序。

2. After comparing the relevant price and comments, I can freely choosethose admirable and handy accommodations. 对比相关价格和点评,我可自由选择那些喜爱和便利的酒店。

3. Gaode electronic map helps me quickly indentify my destination or choosethe most economical and quickest public transport.高德电子地图帮助我快速定位目的地,或者,帮助我选择最经济快捷的公共交通工具。

尾段:再次亮明观点 + 让步不支持观点的合理性

Indeed,the television is never without powerful influence, especially forthe old. Many old people fail to harness complicated cell phone. Their specialway of familiarizing themselves with the latest current events or entertainingthemselves is still to watch Television. In this sense, television has itsspecial group to serve. However, I firmly believe that the mobile will exertgreater and far-reaching influences in this new era.

【解析】:

1. Indeed,the television is never without powerful influence当然,电视远非没有其强大影响。

2. Their special way of familiarizing themselves with the latest currentevents or entertaining themselves is still to watch Television.他们了解时事政治,自我娱乐的方式依然是看电视。

3. The mobile will exert greater and far-reaching influences in this newera. 在我们这个新时代,手机将会带来更多的影响。

【原创范文②】:支持电视比电话影响更大

首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

The 21st century has witnessed the prosperity of high-tech products, thecontrivance of the telephone and television has profoundly revolutionizedpeople’s life in many respects. People’s views differ greatly as to whether ornot telephone exerts a far more profound impact on their lives compared withtelevision. Personally speaking, television is more influential althoughtelephone enjoys its unique merits.

【解析】:

1. The contrivance of …… has profoundly revolutionized people’s life inmany respects. ……的发明在很多方面,极大地影响了人们的生活

2. Personally speaking, television is more influential although telephoneenjoys its unique merits. 我认为:电视的影响更大,尽管电话亦有其优点。

二段: 电视为何更多地影响人们的生活:谈及电视的教育功能

My first convincing argument could be easily explored. A variety oftelevision shows have been gradually becoming an effective way to entertainmodern people, who are living under a pool of pressure due to academic study orheavy workload. As for those students, so busy is the study life and so huge isthe study stress that they nearly have no time available to enjoy someamusements such as playing games or hanging out with their friends, thus,watching television greatly conduces to relaxing their bodies and easing theirminds. A survey conducted by Vista can justify my stand, after polling manyteenagers, many respondents claimed that having a short break via watchingtelevision is their best stress-reducer.

【解析】:

1. So busy is the study life and so huge is the study stress that theynearly have no time available to enjoy some amusements学生,生活繁忙,压力巨大,以至于他们没有时间娱乐放松。

2. Watching television greatly conduces to relaxing their bodies and easingtheir minds 看电视,极其有助于他们放松身心。

3. Having a short break via watching television is their beststress-reducer. 通过看电视短暂休息是他们最佳的放松方式。

三段:电视为何更多地影响人们的生活:谈及电视的娱乐功能

This issue reminds me of my friend Paul, who is a father with aeighteen-year-old child. As he said, some excellent TV programs such as “LectureRoom” can perfectly enact the role of educator, which can broaden children’smental horizons and enlighten children’s wisdom. More precisely, those TVprograms could exert a beneficial influence on children, namely, instructiveprograms could help those who are in the formative years to acquire a wealth ofknowledge in different fields unconsciously.

【解析】:

1. Some excellent TV programs such as “Lecture Room” can perfectly enactthe role of educator 一些优秀的电视节目,例如《百家讲坛》可完美扮演教育者的角色。

2. broaden children’s mental horizons and enlighten children’s wisdom可以拓宽孩子视野,启迪孩子智慧。

3. Instructive programs could help those who are in the formative years toacquire a wealth of knowledge in different fields unconsciously.有教育意义的电视节目可以帮助孩子们不知不觉中学习很多领域的知识。

四段:电话为何也对人们的生活有影响:

Indeed, I have to concede that telephone also has indispensable roles toplay in modern people’s life, especially serving the function of mutualcommunication. Thanks to the invention of the telephone, the distance amongmodern people has become more intimate. For instance, a large number of peopleuse cell phone QQ, Skype and other App to chat with their friends or parents nomatter how for they live from them. What I want to rebut,however,is that incomparison with the mobile phone, television could impose more positiveinfluence on one’s mental growth, charter-training and acquisition ofknowledge.

【解析】:

1. Telephone also has indispensable roles to play in modern people’s life电话在人们的生活中也可以发挥不可缺少的作用。

2. What I want to rebut,however,is that …… 但是,我想要反驳的是……

3. Television could impose more positive influence on one’s mental growth,charter-training and acquisition of knowledge.对于个人的精神成长,性格培养,知识习得,电视的积极影响更大。

尾段:再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)

In a nutshell, my stand is that the limited benefits of the telephone couldnever outshine the entertainment and the educational benefits brought about bythe television.

【解析】:

The limited benefits of the telephone could never outshine theentertainment and the educational benefits brought about by the television.电话有限的利好是无法超越电视在娱乐和教育方面的利好的。

outshine v 使……相形见拙

【作者介绍】

新东方网专栏作家薛鹏老师

新东方网专栏作家:薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥),高中时代出版诗文集《选择坚强》, 每年创作20万字托福雅思原创语料库以及范文。吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17年英语教学经验 (7年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历),前长春新东方功勋教师,多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员(雅思写作8分,托福写作29分)。

爱生活,爱运动,爱音乐电影,爱旅行美食,爱读书摄影,更爱英语教学。20岁登上英语讲台,主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉GRE、IELTS、TOEFL、SAT、CET等各级别词汇教学。

大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你学单词”等专栏。2006年获得“外研社/朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军,全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

对于各类写作课程有精深研究,授课方式行云流水,妙语连珠,知识底蕴深厚,对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

教学理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水,而是点燃一把火)



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